Dr. Jamie Bondage

This seemed choppy to me. Like it didn't flow. But maybe it does. XD I liked the emotion behind it. well written. keep up the good work!

This was good. It's a bit confusing and short. more detail will set the stage for the reader. But I liked it. XD

Interesting...I just found one thing. 1. Glad I can't envy them that. I'd take "that" off because with it doesn't make sense. At least to me. I thought this was ...

This was really good! Excellent job! wonderful descriptions! I loved it. I didn't really see anything wrong with it. A bit sad...but very well written. I can't wait to read ...

I was really lost in this. It was a good start...but confusing. I would suggest spacing outyour paragraphs so it's easier to read. Jamie

I loved this! A little rough...but almost like poetry. I love the ending! XD Keep up the good work! XD

1. his blonde hair gelled up as per usual. Take out "per" It's good...double space. I would suggest making it longer. BUt it's good. XD I liked it. Keep writing! ...

Awh! That is so sweet! XD I love it! Keep writing. Jamie

Thank you very much. Just wondering what others thought. XD I appriciate it!

looks like I was beat to the punch. See, I told you if you spaced it out you would get a lot of crits! XD So...yeah. =p Since everyone else ...

This is way too short for a chapter! Make it part of chapter one.

Double Space!!!!! Put spaces between your paragraphs! I really didn't find any mistakes...I don't think...=p Jamie Bondage

This was excellent...the partridge in a pear tree thing a bit cliche, but I liked it. Can't wait to read more, Jamie Bondage.

Short and sweet, I like it. XD I really didn't see any errors. Sorry I couldn't be more help. Jamie Bondage

1.The guest room was very plain, a four post canopy bed and a dresser was all the decorated it. The should be that. Well written, as usual. XD I didn't ...